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譯題一:地震“12秒”自救逃生絕招
“12 Seconds to Save Yourself” during an Earthquake
The rule of thumb called “12 seconds to save yourself” in earthquake psychology says that, if you retain your presence of mind to find a shelter within the first 12 seconds, you will seize the last chance to save yourself. If not, the odds are against you.
Statistics from Japan indicate that during an earthquake more people die from the strike of falling objects than from the crush of collapsed buildings. It is thus evident that in case of an emergency, if you can keep a good state of mind and take immediate safe-saving actions to flee, you will get a better opportunity to be saved or survive. However, the heart of matter lies in the measures taken then and there on the spot.
在漢語(yǔ)原文中,“12秒自救機(jī)會(huì)”后面沒(méi)有上義詞,它到底是“理論”、“原則”、“概念”、“說(shuō)法”還是“經(jīng)驗(yàn)準(zhǔn)則”呢,這是一個(gè)問(wèn)題。網(wǎng)友也關(guān)注到了這個(gè)問(wèn)題,筆者查閱了相關(guān)的資料,選擇了rule of thumb來(lái)對(duì)譯,即把它看成了“經(jīng)驗(yàn)準(zhǔn)則”?!白跃取边@里不是self-help,因?yàn)閟elf-help強(qiáng)調(diào)“自助、自立”,而非緊急情況下的自救,電影《拯救大兵雷恩》的英文就是Saving Private Ryan?!版?zhèn)定自若”有composed, perfectly calm and collected, retain one’s presence of mind等譯法可以選擇,考慮到文體特色,筆者選擇了retain one’s presence of mind?!敖o自己提供最后一次自救機(jī)會(huì)”與“兇多吉少”應(yīng)該結(jié)合起來(lái)看,這里不能簡(jiǎn)單使用survive一詞,因?yàn)椤皟炊嗉佟辈⒎且欢〞?huì)死,否則就沒(méi)有那些被壓埋以后得到拯救的幸存者了。地震中存在“自救”和“他救”兩種情況,因此有網(wǎng)友翻譯說(shuō)otherwise, you couldn’t survive是不對(duì)的。在翻譯“兇多吉少”時(shí),有網(wǎng)友照抄詞典翻譯,bode ill rather than well, 不注意詞性和上下文的銜接,這不是正確的翻譯方法。同樣是考慮風(fēng)格的一致,筆者選擇了the odds are against you來(lái)翻譯這個(gè)漢語(yǔ)成語(yǔ),這里也可以用英語(yǔ)的另一個(gè)成語(yǔ),behind the eight ball來(lái)翻譯,但筆者感覺(jué)后一個(gè)不夠嚴(yán)肅,可能純屬感覺(jué)。
第二段中“超過(guò)被壓死的人”后面可以適當(dāng)補(bǔ)充,翻譯成the crush of collapsed buildings,與前面的the strike of falling objects形成對(duì)稱。“良好的心理狀態(tài)”可以翻得簡(jiǎn)單一些,keep a good state of mind,不用psychology or psyche等詞可以使行文更加流暢?!氨苊馑劳觥边@里可以說(shuō)survive。最后是一個(gè)問(wèn)句,根據(jù)上下文的語(yǔ)意和修辭問(wèn)句的功能,筆者覺(jué)得可以改成肯定句來(lái)翻譯,因此有the heart of matter lies in the measures taken then and there on the spot,其中then and there與on the spot有所重復(fù),目的也是為了強(qiáng)調(diào)“現(xiàn)場(chǎng)”這一意義。
Confronted with Three Troubles, Post -70s Choose between Work and Family
The employees, especially those post-70s who are now about 35 years old, have great pressure from work. A statistical analysis that has been recently made of employee ages by Central China Human Resources Website reveals that, more than half of those employees suffering from work-related stress or depression are 35 years old or so, among whom males aged 35-38 and females 28-33 are most frustrated.
According to the analysis report, the workers of 35 years old or so are restless in mind, for they have more pressure than people of other age groups from career, family and society. They have a high incidence of such occupational troubles as long-time exhaustion, diminished interest and bottleneck effect (compared to three mountains in the Chinese language).
譯題二中的問(wèn)題大致有兩類,一是“困惑”一詞的翻譯,根據(jù)英語(yǔ)用詞的規(guī)律,可以適當(dāng)考慮同義詞的替換,在筆者的翻譯中,前后使用了trouble and frustrate (frustration)這兩個(gè)詞,其它可以選擇的詞匯還包括baffle, stifle等。第二類是專業(yè)術(shù)語(yǔ),包括“職業(yè)壓力癥”、“抑郁傾向”以及后面的“職業(yè)倦怠、新鮮感衰退、進(jìn)階瓶頸”等。前面一組兩個(gè)術(shù)語(yǔ)分別翻譯成work-related stress 和depression。對(duì)后面的三個(gè)分析如下:“職業(yè)倦怠”就是指“職業(yè)枯竭”,通行的英文術(shù)語(yǔ)是burnout syndrome, 但漢語(yǔ)的分類似乎不是很合理,“新鮮感衰退”應(yīng)該是“職業(yè)倦怠”的一部分,因此我把前兩種困惑翻譯成了long-time exhaustion and diminished interest?!斑M(jìn)階瓶頸”是指在公司長(zhǎng)期得不到晉升的機(jī)會(huì),可以翻譯成bottleneck effect。最后,部分網(wǎng)友以網(wǎng)址代替網(wǎng)站名稱的做法是否可取,有待商榷。
譯題三:你的薪酬誰(shuí)做主
這一段文字本來(lái)我也翻譯了一下,但看了各位網(wǎng)友的翻譯,覺(jué)得好幾個(gè)都翻的不錯(cuò),特別是金小衛(wèi)的翻譯,讓人眼前一亮,整個(gè)翻譯用詞簡(jiǎn)練,結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。所以我把自己的翻譯刪除了。
這里有幾個(gè)語(yǔ)言點(diǎn)分析一下。第一是“加薪要求”,說(shuō)到底就是ask for a rise ( or raise),rise是英國(guó)英語(yǔ),raise是美國(guó)英語(yǔ)。預(yù)約面談?dòng)悬c(diǎn)重復(fù),用appointment以后就不要說(shuō)interview或face-to-face talk了,那樣就羅嗦了。這一段漢語(yǔ)文字的特點(diǎn)就是羅嗦,所以翻譯時(shí)適當(dāng)省略是必要的。說(shuō)實(shí)在的,我剛開(kāi)始做的一些翻譯,就是太忠實(shí)于原文的文字了,現(xiàn)在看去都有些后悔?!肮ぷ鳂I(yè)績(jī)”就是performance, accomplishments或者contribution。最后是“仔細(xì)權(quán)衡”這一詞語(yǔ),綜合網(wǎng)友的翻譯,我覺(jué)得judge, think twice和consider explicitly都不錯(cuò)。另外想指出的是最后一句話,“不建議立即跳槽”,金小衛(wèi)處理的很靈活,forget job-hopping。
英譯漢時(shí)不要掉入理解的陷阱
翻譯語(yǔ)言同樣可以生動(dòng)形象
翻譯中對(duì)網(wǎng)絡(luò)資源利用
專家簡(jiǎn)介:
張明權(quán),安徽省固鎮(zhèn)縣人,江蘇大學(xué)外國(guó)語(yǔ)學(xué)院副教授,英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)言文學(xué)碩士,上外博士課程班進(jìn)修。主要從事英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)言學(xué)和翻譯學(xué)研究,在國(guó)內(nèi)外學(xué)術(shù)期刊發(fā)表論文10余篇,出版譯著兩部,發(fā)表其他文章20余篇,有大量翻譯實(shí)踐經(jīng)驗(yàn),翻譯總字?jǐn)?shù)接近200萬(wàn)。Email: [email protected]。
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